Man walks in to his bedroom where his wish is carrying a sheep under his arm and says this is the pig I've been fucking.wife says that's not a pig that's a sheep dumbass.husband says I was talking to the sheep
Too many frills. Simplify it. "A guy walks into the bedroom with a sheep under his arm and says, 'This is the pig I've been fuckin.' His wife says, 'That's a sheep not a pig.' And he says, 'I wasn't talkin to you!'" It has to go bam-bam-bam. Think of how quickly they develop the backstory on 'The Simpsons.' Then you'll have the proper pace...
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Too many frills. Simplify it. "A guy walks into the bedroom with a sheep under his arm and says, 'This is the pig I've been fuckin.' His wife says, 'That's a sheep not a pig.' And he says, 'I wasn't talkin to you!'" It has to go bam-bam-bam. Think of how quickly they develop the backstory on 'The Simpsons.' Then you'll have the proper pace...