Yo, Mal, just read your prologue, it's epic, one thing is will say if you won't hate me, is the start is quiet sudden. If u imagine climaxing at a of 1 through to 10 you start at about 6 and to go up instead of 1. If you add in a bit we the mc is like walking to her bedroom, and maybe calling her name and not getting a response?
Also what site did u use I got smth I wanna start.
mal 🌸
oo okay i see
mal 🌸
that was slightly intentional since its only a prologue, and chapter one is starting a lot slower and the like story of what happened when she went into her friends room will be revealed later and i didnt wanna spoil anything there
mal 🌸
so i kept it like short and intense
mal 🌸
but ill definitely think abt that when i go to revise it!
mal 🌸
also i used quotev so i like made an account and then just published it
Another New Blach
Neat
Another New Blach
Thanks